Ambition
As I lay on my bed,
I think of all of the endless possibilities ahead.
Life has in store
Because life isn’t even close to a bore.
Live, love,laugh
Or just simply Laugh your life away
Because there shouldn’t be room for sadness on any day.
As they say you live and you learn
No need to grief on your mistakes indeed.
Don't let a setback burn your fire.
Remember . . .
You always have yourself to lean on.
Authors Notes:
I wrote this poem for motivational purposes Do you feel I excelled that aspect? what did you feel as you read it ?
What was your favorite line?
Is there anything that should be added or edited out?
I love the first stanza because I feel like we all have that moment when we're in bed and it takes so much for us to get up to start our days. You did a great job executing the theme of ambition but the audience needs more! The rhythm built up in my head and it came to a close too quickly, I would love for this to be a bit longer because it has so much potential and unlimited directions that it could prosper!
ReplyDeleteI also liked the first stanza because everyone can relate to this. Curiosity about our future ahead is always on our minds. Yes, you definitely excelled that aspect. I felt motivated to never give up and learn from my mistakes rather than regret my choices in life. My favorite line was " I think of all of the endless possibilities ahead". No I think this poem was properly put together and doesn't need any editing to it.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feed back as writing this poem motivated me to continue pushing and not give up. Yes, when we’re in our bed it’s key we thinking about positive things that help us start our day great and not letting the negativity around us affect us.
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